JoMC 711 – Writing for Digital Media

October 1, 2006

Filed under: Uncategorized — by cinranker @ 4:01 pm

Module 6 Assignments
Rewrite Headlines

First headline as it appeared:

Computer Virus Writers Plan Slow Spread

I thought this sounded awkward.  I rewrote it:

Computer Viruses Designed to Spread Slowly

Second headline as it appeared:

Anna Nicole Gets Committed

This was misleading.  After I read the article, I rewrote the headline:

Anna Nicole and Lawyer Make Commitment

Third headline as it appeared:

Immigration Border Security

This headline appeared on the website of the National Association of Social Workers. It is a general headline, but the article was really talking about advocating against current legislation.  I rewrote the headline:

Members Urged to Advocate Against Current Immigration Bills

Article from Internet to Rewrite:

Here is the original article (retrieved from Mugglenet.com):


New WOMBATs and more at JKR.com

Topping off the best week in Potter news in a long while, a handful of updates have been added to our favorite author’s site. Firstly, the much-anticipated second round of WOMBATs (Wizards’ Ordinary Magic and Basic Aptitude tests) have arrived. Go to the Room of Requirement (by clicking the eraser on the desk) and you will find the door unlocked. For instructions on beginning the test, click the “Read more” link below – but for fun, try and figure it out yourself first!Now for the other updates. In the news, Jo gives us the latest on the eBay situation and discusses the “honor” of HP topping this year’s list of the most-banned books.Also, JK’s diary has a new entry concerning the process of creating a new word for the books, which she did yesterday.In the rumors section, Rowling slams: Stubby Boardman is Regulus Black,” Book 7 will be called ‘Harry Potter and the Graveyard of Memories’,” and Snape was hiding under the Invisibility Cloak on the night the Potters died.”  Finally, Brazilian site Potterish.com is the latest winner of Jo’s fan site award.

My Version of the Article
:
New WOMBATs and More at JKR.com

Topping off the best week in Potter news in a long while, a handful of updates has been added to our favorite author’s site.  First, the much-anticipated second round of WOMBATs (Wizards’ Ordinary Magic and Basic Aptitude tests) has arrived.  Go to the Room of Requirement (by clicking the eraser on the desk) and you will find the door unlocked.  For instructions to begin the test, click the “Read more” link below – but for fun, try to figure it out yourself first!
 

Other updates include:

*     The latest word on the eBay situation

*     A discussion about the “honor” of HP
topping this year’s list of the most-banned books

*     An entry concerning the process to create a
new word for the books

*     An announcement of the latest winner of
Jo’s fan site award

JK debunks the following rumors: 

*     Stubby Boardman is Regulus Black

*     Book 7 will be called Harry Potter and the Graveyard of Memories

*     Snape was hiding under the Invisibility Cloak the night the Potters died

Headlines for story lede:

Homeland Security’s Federal Antiterrorism Database
Full of Surprises

Federal Antiterrorism Database Full of Surprises

Surprises on Homeland Security Database No Laughing Matter: List used to allocate antiterrorism grants

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1 Comment »

  1. good headline fix on the computer viruses; yours more clearly indicates what in fact is spreading.

    on the second, suggest marry instead of make commitment, which is still a bit vague. or “try to marry” because i think there was question as to whether it was a legitimate ceremony.

    on the third, i like your specificity. one problem: “advocate against”. Change advocate since the word means support, endorse, promote, or the opposite of against. Maybe:
    Members Urged to Fight Immigration Bills

    On the database story:
    Good first head, getting “surprises” into it
    Others effective as well.

    good work

    Comment by tarheelblue — October 5, 2006 @ 10:33 pm |Reply


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